Stuck Undertow

Surges of crystal waves roll upon the shore

A wondrous sight that cannot be ignored

Life up here is quaint and peaceful

But appearances can be deceitful

Reeling me in like a magic trick

Only to pull me under lightning quick

Anchors tugging me down below

Darkness engulfing me nice and slow

Trapped undersea silently drowning

No one would hear if I tried shouting

Pain ricocheted from loss? Grief?

The bond severed; my trust stolen like a thief

These rugged scars placed on my heart

Retaliated by slowly tearing me apart

Accepting the end of motherly love

Willing the cold depths to take me, praying to God above

– A.Stuebbe

13 Comments

  1. Sheesh. This one read like a song. Excellent work on this one as well. ๐Ÿคฏ

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    1. Ali Marie says:

      Wow – Thank you. ๐Ÿ˜Š That is such a nice compliment. I tend to like the flow of poems that rhyme. It holds a lot of meaning and just poured out of me.

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      1. Same. That is the style that I love as well. Narrative poems I have such a blast putting together. I can tell, you bled the words. Deep and thought provoking. ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ‘

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      2. Ali Marie says:

        Thank you! So much truth with โ€œbled the wordsโ€. Just like Hemingway said: โ€œAll you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed.โ€ Something we all do as writers and once weโ€™ve written whatโ€™s on our chest, it lifts a little weight and allows us to breath a little easier ๐Ÿ˜Š

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      3. Brownie points ๐Ÿ’ฏfor you for knowing that was a Hemingway quote lol.๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ˜ So well said. The anxiety and strife is expunged and then we begin to recharge our psyche. ๐Ÿ˜Œโ˜บ๏ธ

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      4. Ali Marie says:

        Well, thank you. Thank you very much *Elvis voice* ๐Ÿ˜†

        So many family members/friends have told me that they donโ€™t know how I read and write like I do. Saying that they couldnโ€™t do that. Aside from enjoying it, itโ€™s as you said โ€œrecharge our psycheโ€.

        You get it. What we write, using our words… is our art.

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      5. Haha! You did not just quote Elvis! More brownie points! This is nuts, you just used that quote and I wrote a short story a month ago set in a dystopian future revolving around the only remaining robot in the world. His name is E.L.V.I.S.. The caretakers have modified the robot knowing that it is the last piece of resistance they have against the evils of the world. He randomly quotes Elvis and when he gets activated for the first time he says, “thank you, thank you very much,” in an Elvis voice. Haha. What a crazy coincidence! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜‚

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      6. Ali Marie says:

        Haha! Guilty.
        Ooo that sounds like an interesting read! Definitely such a crazy coincidence ๐Ÿคฃ Seems our minds ride the same wave length lol ๐Ÿค™๐Ÿผ

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      7. Before I replied to your comment, my mouth was hanging open in shock at the uncanny timing. I looked around my living room, making sure I wasn’t bugged, lol! I think that’s a good way of putting it for sure. Definitely on the same wave length! We…are…AWESOME! Haha! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ™Œ

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      8. Ali Marie says:

        Haha. I swear your not bugged ๐Ÿ˜† And we most definitely are awesome! Cheers to that! ๐Ÿป

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      9. That’s exactly what a person who bugged another person would say! ๐Ÿ˜‚ Hmmm…..๐Ÿค” Lol jk. Absolutely, cheers! ๐Ÿป

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      10. Ali Marie says:

        Travis… you caught me. Dang! Lol.

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      11. Haha!!! Love it. You are too funny! I’m flattered! โ˜บ๏ธ

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